雅思复议申请全攻略之二：可复议作文

　　金老师分析：

　　这个题目结尾问同意不同意，在开头段回应任务的时候，一定会清楚表明你的同意或不同意的意向，来完成任务回应的初步评分!当然，即使是这样的题目，你也可以选择不同意题目的说法，然后写等分，说两者都重要!

　　例如：我不同意这一说法。通过阅读、电影和高科技的网络了解世界固然是经济、方便的，但某种程度上，旅行可以带来只管的感受和体验，验证我们在书上或互联网上看到的。

　　当然，这个题目也可以写偏分，说不同意!

　　例如：我不同意题目中的观点。尽管书本和互联网的信息可以让我们了解外面的世界。但是那些都是别人眼中的世界!旅行可以不仅仅让我们去验证这些我们读到的知识，还让我们有自己的认知，第一手的经验，看到更多的不同和从多角度来体验、感受!所以不是不必要!

　　但无论怎么写，切题是评分关键!大多数同学采取等分，比较好写!那么就要写清楚旅行的优势和读书、互联网的优势，在了解世界学习文化方面!

　　以上是正常对本文的任务回应的一个建。那么有很多考生文章写走题了，也就是没有任务回应，不回答文章的问题，逻辑论述不切题!于是，就算词句尚可，也不能拿到6分就6分以上。

　　复议作文题目

　　“It is not necessary for people to travel and learn about the culture of the other. We can learn the other culture from books, films and Internet. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?”

　　文章点评

　　Nowadays, with the exponential growth rate of traveling between different places, a heated debate is ignited. Some people claim that it is essential for them to learn other cultures through tours, while others suppose that books, films and Internet have offered enough materials for them to learn cultures. However, I do not judge the two sides as ambivalent.

　　开头段倒是还算清晰!自己的立场也基本明了!

　　It is undeniable that books, films and Internet do bring a large sum of information and knowledge about cultures from all of the world. Sometimes pictures and videos with words demonstration can make people better understand other cultures than the way of traveling and these knowledge can be even more specific and in detail. Also, it is much more convenient and easier for people to acquaint different cultures by means of record material than going traveling.

　　拓展实在较弱。观点的框架有，但内部可以具体论述的看不到!在任务回应和逻辑上评分不会太好!

　　However, reaching the above mentioned conclusion does not mean that we should turn a blind eye to the benefits of traveling. Actually, it is significant for people to feel the local cultural atmosphere when learning a new culture and this kind of feeling can never be replaced by any other means. Furthermore, food, as one kind of culture, can never be tasted though books, films or Internet, since food is intangible.

　　整体文章写得比较空!都是一些泛泛而谈的句子!没有实际的论述!

　　In conclusion, both traveling and the means of books, films and Internet are good way of learning cultures.

　　金老师点评：

　　如果这基本还原了文章，那么这样相对空洞的论述在第一、第二评分项上冲不到6分。刻意增加了用词的难度，这还是可以的，是文章的亮点!但句式的难度一般!

　　文章言之无物后，即使词句不错，也不太能引起考官的注意和较好评分!这是雅思写作的关键!一定要写出东西!

　　故而我只给了5.5，到6的把握不是太大，只有最多一半可能!

　　本文作者：偏锋出国(公众号：偏锋出国)

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